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Our relationship broken,
We got off on the wrong foot,
Plagued full of awkward silence and twisted words,
Now confined in this hollow box,
Our eyes meet, both of us uncomfortable,
Each looking for something to break the silence,
As I strain my mind for false banter,
I give up my pathetic attempt,
I ponder, is this worth it?
Is this the woman I once loved?
If so, the love is no longer there,
Realising this I weep inside, for ever letting her slip away,
I reach to my gun, weighing me down,
Place it at my head, reconsidering this dead love,
Then pull the trigger, ending my misery.
©2004-2009 ~Hells-Preacher
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When you are uncomfortable around the one you once loved.........is it time to let go?

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:icondoyoucare:
nice stuff man im sure we've all felt that occwerd silence before
i no i have

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Indeed my friend.

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" .......... I shot a guy who gives a fuck. "
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Excellent work, it's hard to forget about the past, and when you're around it everyday, it's even harder. Because I know you in real life, I can really understand where you're coming from. This one stands out for me the most, among your other brilliant poems.
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Great reflection on the deterioration of a relationship, that was doomed from the beginning....

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Thank you for your extremely in depth comment my friend. Its great someone can relate to me.

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" .......... I shot a guy who gives a fuck. "
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Thank you. The point I was trying to get across. Unfortunately a very true chapter of my life.

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So sad...it reminds me of my own misadventure in the relationship departmant. Truly heartbreaking and relatable, it's just horrible that anyone should have to go through something like that. You wrote this beautifully, another favorite for me to add. Great work.
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Thank you for this lovely comment. I am so glad someone can relate to this, as it was a bleak point in my life.

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You're very welcome, just trying to be helpful.

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